one, summer evening
he closed, the door
walked down, the steps
one summer evening
sat, behind the wheel
turned, the key
one summer evening
maybe, he remembered
the (swaying) jungle palms
one summer evening
of happ(ier) times
in, malay'sia
one summer evening
no more, listening, to
we’ve heard it all, before
one summer evening
a short, drive
packed, locked and loaded
one summer evening
a, scribbled note
and, some scotch tape
one summer evening
sealed, tight
hold tight,
one, summer evening
just, one turn
of a
key
one, summer
evening
poetry | 101 | rehab | evening
My prompt for this week’s Poetry 1o1 Rehab Prompt is EVENING.
What does your mind turn to in the evening?
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Lovely and poignant.
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I agree! Great prompt.
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Thank you!
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you’re welcome 🙂
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Thank you Lizl.
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For this prompt, I am recycling one of my old (but relatively recent) poems, written for the Day 6 assignment of Writing 201: Poetry in February 2015: http://wp.me/p5BCD4-oJ “Like Fireflies”. It remains one of my favorites.
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It is a lovely poem, thank you for sharing once more Lizl.
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🙂
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there is an element of foreboding here – a finality – closure – and it is slightly disturbing; not that I mind; not all poetry has to be sunshine and roses.
You’ve done an interesting and excellent job of conveying a story here – I like the carefully chosen words, the line breaks, the emphasis that is directed by the way it all comes together.
😀 Andy
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Thank you! The story is indeed a sad one, and writing it was itself (another) attempt at closure.
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I do hope it offered some comfort and peace.
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I submit my poem, A Midnight Quest, part of my Quest series, for this:
http://melindakucsera.com/2016/01/25/a-midnight-quest/
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Thank you for contributing this to the Rehab!
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You’re welcome 🙂 it fit the theme of the week perfectly.
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This is a faultlessly moving poem. The way you use unconventional punctuation, especially the poignant commas after ‘definite’ articles almost moved this very cynical reader to tears. It reminds me of post-minimalist classical music.
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Thank you very much, that is quite an amazing response to my poem, a difficult story and written in haste. Really appreciate it.
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i like the reiteration – beautiful writing. such lush imagery and the tumbling rhythm… i love this piece. it kinda made me feel homesick for somewhere i’ve never been. a strange and wonderful feeling……………..
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Thank you, I didn’t think this poem would provoke such responses…
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I like how you handle repetition, nicely done!
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Thank you…it was a reflection of how I was thinking about the subject of the poem, going round and round….
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Here is mine… http://susanscreativewritingandpoetry.com/2016/01/26/evening-times-poetry101-rehab-12616/
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A fine poem with a disturbing final line
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Your poem is so good! Passion filled and wonderful! From my dreamland:
https://writersdream9.wordpress.com/2016/01/28/sagetanka/
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Thank you, and also for contributing yours!
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My pleasure!
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nicely put…very rhythmic
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Thank you, that would be the rhythmic tapping on my iPhone…
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Beautiful and deep – here’s my effort, late but posted!
https://arousedblog.wordpress.com/2016/01/30/evening/
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Thank you, and for your own contribution!
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Here is my take on the prompt. https://oudeis2005.wordpress.com/2016/01/30/sunday-evening/
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Here’s my poem for the most recent prompt:
https://schattenengel.wordpress.com/2016/02/01/in-the-evenings-light/
Your poem is great Andy and so is the prompt. I enjoyed thinking and writing about it 🙂
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Thank you, I’m glad you continue to take part!
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