she found that, as though broken
about everything beautiful, nothing mattered
as she looked, over the bridge
her young body, quivered
as she thought about attempting the leap
or showing him the door
wanting freedom, or imaginary rights
it was sad beyond belief
good, not ever had she imagined
regions of death, would
be found to break her
(for mara’s poetry 101 rehab – found)
*the words in italics are the last three words of the first ten of the longer stories included in the random house / vintage collection of the complete short stories by kafka*
Really nice!
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Thank you!
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You had me at Kafka.
I love how you tangle up Kafka’s phrases with your own words, and the result is beautifully complex. I almost felt it could be two poems wound together – this is the whole product, but if you took just a few words away it would be incomplete.
Kafkaesque indeed.
Thanks for sharing 🙂
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Thank you, I really appreciate your words, I wasn’t sure what people would think of this one!
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You made me cry!
I felt the longing, the desperate wish, the grieving and I found myself hoping that your character would stay strong and not lose hope.
(Actually, I looked at this poem first time during the third period on my mobile and my facial expreesion made my teacher ask if everything’s alright…. )
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Thank you, I am humbled that my poem had this effect…and actually, yes I think the character will stay strong…
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That”s very comforting to know 🙂
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Life can be good, if we allow it.
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how true …
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Thank you for your scariest contribution yet. You and Kafka, how much more depressive can it get 😉 ? What you created out of Kafka is brilliant.
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Oh… thank you, I don’t know what else to say…
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that to me is a young marriage, naievity in the thought of perfection and romance enduring, the bitterness seeping in x
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Oh dear….yes I am afraid that I see your point, a sad story so common in many people’s lives?
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well yes….
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