real world in trouble everyone lives in a bubble does any one care about the trouble under so much rubble can it really be so much trouble eventually -
real world in trouble everyone lives in a bubble under so much rubble so, are we really in trouble eventually -
real world in trouble everyone lives in a bubble can it really be so much trouble yes, they will burst our bubble can it really be so much trouble look out, I told you, they’re really gonna burst our bubble eventually -
(for mara’s poetry 101 rehab – recycle)
*shot with iphone 5, edited in snapseed mobile, adverbs reduced, reused and recycled*
andy townend 
This one is great.
The rhythm makes it sounds almost like a asong.
The meaning is emphasized by the repetition without making it boring.
I really love it!
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Thank you, I must confess to enjoying this one a lot!
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I have to admit that doesn’t surprise me 😉
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I like this, it looks like you put a lot of thought into it, nice job 🙂
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Thank you, really appreciate that!
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I like the progression of ‘will it happen’ to ‘it will happen’. And I love how you set each stanza as an acrostic. Cleverly done.
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Thank you! I enjoyed shaping this one a lot.
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Strangely enough, this reminds me of the song “Uprising” by Muse. I love your recycling very much, including the reduced, reused and recycled adverbs, and the gorgeous photo, which I wish I had taken myself. I bow to your skills.
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“Packaged lie to keep us trapped in greed…: perhaps?
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That . . . is a very good explanation. The average greed of the average person was so well planned.
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The words came from the lyrics to the Muse track to which Mara referred. Synchronicity.
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I will be back to see more – thank you!
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Would love to know what you make of my latest dark poem…?
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Oh, and please, no bowing!!!
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Brilliant Andy. Excellent.
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Oh DJ!! Thank you…
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Excellent, Andy!
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Thank you Lucile!
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You’re most welcome!
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Awesome poem ! Thought of doing an acrostic about it too but the idea never materialised. Great choice of rhymes.
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Thank you Ysobel!
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this has a great rhythm like a song, I wanted to rap to it x
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Thank you Justine! Now could I convince you to rap to it, record and tweet it? x
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haha yah think people would want to listen me rapping to it? lol im not cool you know 😀
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Maybe you could become cool, a whole new life ! 😉
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^^
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isn’t one just cool…rather than becoming cool? lol x
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I think it possible to become anything you want, no?
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oh I am not sure about that..maybe in one’s mind, but whether the body follows suit is another thing hehex
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Ok, so now I know that you are, in fact, cool!
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Lol blushes x
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